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    dots Submission Name: I Would For You dots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 501
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       OH I LOVED THE MAN THIS WAS WROTE FOR!


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    I Would For You

    Pulsation of remorse cascade throughout my heart,
    While I sit and recollect my memories of you.
    Uneasiness and agony escort me during these reflections,
    Longing that I could reconstruct the antiquity of our existence.
    Conscious now that I would only damage you from the start,
    At that time, I would not permit this to be something I would do.
    I would in addition renounce all of my affections,
    That I have eternally retained for you and cage them at a distance.

    Unconditionally this I would do just to keep you sheltered,
    From the mental anguish and betrayal of my love and lust.
    All the while I would still be mourning your love to embrace me,
    Beseeching your love to cure my affliction and hallucination.
    I would neglect myself to keep our intimacy from being altered,
    Nevertheless, holding on to you as a friend to me is a must.
    Hence as I settle here I hope that you not trickle a tear for me to see,
    I wish to behold a smile for this will be my final separation.




    Submitted on 2007-09-16 08:00:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I would neglect myself to keep our intimacy from being altered,
    Nevertheless holding on to you as a friend to me is a must."

    I've been here before.

    This is an almost heart-wrenching piece.

    You did a really awesome job.
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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