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    dots Submission Name: Passingdots
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    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 1124
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 297



    Description:
       I am posting this from memory, as I am too lazy to get up and get my notebook. So I may come back and change it to match what I originally wrote.


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    dotsPassingdots
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    As years go by
    endless days of summer
    cease to stretch into the horizon
    The carefree days of youth
    like so many grains of sand
    that have slipped
    too quickly
    through the hands of time
    Minutes carefully measured now
    into daily routine




    Submitted on 2004-06-21 15:39:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
       Heh, this works! The stucture is excellent; it really brings out your words. Good memory! You must really think while you write, and it shows in the quality.
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by Erchomenos | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i really liked this i loved the flow and my favo lines were
    Minutes carefully measured now
    into daily routine
    well good lop and that is pretty good that you can remember your poems. i cant do that. lia
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]


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