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    dots Submission Name: The Promise Made dots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    The Promise Made

    Resting close to you, perfected words were said.
    No tender love made, just a promise instead.
    Firmly holding on to you, letting go was done
    A haunting kiss made, in time for me to forever run.

    Forgotten words were said, moving far away from you.
    A promise was made, out of passion for this you knew.
    Holding on to you is done, slowly you have to let go.
    Time you must forever run, from a haunting kiss you know.

    Looking tearfully back, seeing my many stinging regrets
    It is endlessly gorgeous you, the one my heart never forgets.
    The promise that was made, was not ever meant to be broken.
    Those words that my heart said, should have never been spoken.

    Wishing to turn over that steadfast hourglass, to go back again
    Dreaming you was never hurt, that our love never had to end.
    Cursing the promise that was made, for it was never done.
    A promise made ,for me to see you before my time to run.

    Resting forever now, you, my eyes could never again face.
    All our tender love made are only memories and visions to trace.
    Firmly holding on to you and all the words we spoke.
    A haunting kiss made and a promise forever broke.




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      This is lovely...really.

    So full or longing and regret and beautiful, BEAUTIFUL words...

    "Looking tearfully back, seeing my many stinging regrets
    It is endlessly gorgeous you, the one my heart never forgets
    The promise that was made, was not ever meant to be broken
    Those words that my heart said, should have never been spoken "

    AMAZING!!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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