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    dots Submission Name: The Dark Place dots

    Author: amrslamr
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 18/18/16
    Words: 525
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    dotsThe Dark Place dots

    The Dark Place
    Written Sunday, September 16, 2007

    All my life, Iíve had you locked away in a dark place: You were in my heart.
    No one else knew of the secret place I kept you.
    I was afraid that someone would talk me into letting you leave, and I would be left in darkness that seemed deeper for having known such brilliance.

    You knew all my secrets, you knew me growing up, you helped me grow up.
    You took me from a child to a woman, and grew into a man between my legs.

    I remember seeing your head against the sky, in the Texas summer.
    The light shining behind you, burning a permanent imprint of your body onto mine.
    It doesnít show but I can feel it.

    The heat, and the passion of your exertions put sweat upon your back.
    I felt it with my hands. It dripped down onto my face.
    I licked it. I licked you. You were salty, and hot against my tongue.
    I pushed harder to get you inside me.

    I wanted you everywhere, everywhere.
    I wanted you in my skin, in my body, in my heart and soul.
    You were. You lived there.
    But I kicked you out. Over some triviality.
    You said. She said. I hurt. I hurt you.
    And you were gone.

    No more love escapes in your car.
    No more runaways. No more hooky on rainy days.
    So I kept you in my heart. In the dark place. Where I was lonely and in pain and lost, and I needed your light more than ever.

    Now, decades have passed, and Iím ready to let you out.
    But, wait: Iíve released you and youíre not running.
    Youíre still here, your head against the sky, the light shining behind you.
    Or, is the light shining through you, and into me?
    Making a new imprint of your body onto mine.
    It doesnít show but I can feel it.

    The heat, and the passion of your exertions makes your body shine with sweat.
    I feel it with my hands. I lick it. I lick you.
    Itís more salty than before, because there are tears mixed in.
    Tears of gratitude. Tears of joy. Tears of relief. Just a few are from sadness that you will fill someone elseís dark places with your light, instead of mine.

    But I am no longer a child, crying, frightened of the dark.
    I am a woman, now. You made me that.
    I can see your light from a distance.
    Itís beautiful, and magnificent and warm.
    Even from here.

    And, in my own heart, growing dark again,
    I spot a tiny red glow, left behind.
    I breathe on it.
    I can make my own light.

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