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    dots Submission Name: Crimson Angerdots
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    Author: Kenji Light
    ASL Info:    19/M/between the lines
    Elite Ratio:    5.46 - 367/355/67
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1225
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    Description:
       This is the week's pity party. Its more of a rant but that isn't my style.


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    dotsCrimson Angerdots
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    I'm crying, though the tears refuse to come.
    This mental anguish, like a million pin pricks,
    Casts down upon me its wrath, that numb feeling.
    I'm cold and distant now, mind burning beneath,
    Beneath the surface, a raging wildfire of emotion.
    Angry thoughts find themselves becoming expressed.
    I remember people I don't know, they laugh at me.
    They snicker and tell me I'm crazy and should go.
    Was I to be locked away within an asylum?
    It wouldn't matter, I'd be safely concealed in insanity.
    New friends tell her to leave me, I'm a hazard to her.
    I wouldn't hurt her, though I hurt, bleeding anger.
    That crimson emotion seems to flow so freely,
    Expelled by dry tears and sharp tongue,
    Like a serpentine lashing out at those around him,
    My surroundings are closing in, four walls converging.
    All have but one wish and that is to vanquish me.
    But, I have not yet left my mark on this pitiful planet.
    That infantile king has not yet brought the axe down,
    To lop off the head of his twisted jester, who cries.
    I guess I won't be making anyone laugh now...




    Submitted on 2004-06-21 16:02:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece just kind of ticks me off. Hopefully you've learned to just flick off those that laugh at you and learn to grasp on to your personal pride as would your girlfriends breasts.
    Its all you got sometimes when you get depressed.
    If you truly belonged in an asylum, you wouldn't be able to identify your own feelings in this way.
    You would have total disregard for them if you were crazy.
    Nice write
    MyX
    | Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent! They [censored], but yet they do not know how close they came to seeing that dragon withing your burning eyes. i like this rage inflicted piece.There is no need to lash out, but then again, if you must hurt and cannot, you only hurt youself within your own shell, punch a wall, it doesn't punch back, you know...ha!
    | Posted on 2004-09-26 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]
      This is how it all felt for me once...But i don't have to worry about that now. You wrote this really good and are always doing the best of job to let your emotions flow so well and freely. Even though it may not seem like it to you, but you seem at least in a little sense control. Thats how you do this. You control your mind to express everything. If you could do this, than you can get past all the emotional hurt. someday anyway.
    Anywho, this was very well written and was very deep. Good job!
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Broken heart dies | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think this is your style, I agree with that. I think that is was both sad and beautiful, as many have said before, and that there was anger in this piece too.

    Although, I loved the main idea of everything...
    | Posted on 2004-07-11 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]


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