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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Golden Skiesdots
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    Author: A Silver Key
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 4/7/29
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A Quarter Moon in June


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    dotsSweet Golden Skiesdots
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    Indigo blue

    escapes

    this midnight hue

    hiding from

    bitter skies

    which come as no surprise

    almost like a liar's lies

    and raindrops

    falling from teary eyes

    Footprints

    are mere echoes

    of bad goodbyes

    Bloodshot

    I almost forgot

    That I loved you

    a lot

    That you loved me

    not

    And now there's nothing left

    but shadows of your quarter moon

    in blooming June

    on a beautiful grey afternoon

    which remind me

    of a popped balloon

    That I won't be seeing you

    anytime soon

    Now Ivory clouds

    and pearl white doves

    fly higher

    together

    thru inclement weather

    into Indigo

    and climbing higher

    fighting fire

    past the lies told by a liar

    to anywhere they so desire

    above the bitter

    and into Sapphire

    past the cold

    into the old

    letting the truth unfold

    forgetting lies that I once told

    and now needing the soul that I sold

    past the indigo, ivory, and white

    straight into the night

    kissing sweet skies of gold

    and whispering

    I love you

    a lot

    Forget me

    not






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      the more of you sork i read the more i want to almost cry, not tears of saness though, tears becuase it is so beautiful ....

    "I almost forgot

    That I loved you

    a lot

    That you loved me

    not"

    these words can really describe me right now, i felt for this one guy, and i felt he didnt feel for me at all..and now he hates me...
    the ending is beautiful as well

    "letting the truth unfold

    forgetting lies that I once told

    and now needing the soul that I sold

    past the indigo, ivory, and white

    straight into the night

    kissing sweet skies of gold

    and whispering

    I love you

    a lot

    Forget me

    not"

    it is just truly wonderful!

    i will read more of your work as soon as i can

    Bella

    btw, hope you dot mind if i add this to my favs...:)


    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-09-25 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]


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