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    dots Submission Name: Cricket Criesdots

    Author: A Silver Key
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 4/7/29
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Sonya, will you marry me?

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    dotsCricket Criesdots

    Dancing doggedly on the tips of wet blades of olive green grass
    Tilted proudly across a shady mystic meadow
    Significant breezes touch the face of two shadows.
    Whispering wishes caress the landscape with purposeful deliberation
    Bees tiptoe underneath the morning's majestic glow
    Roses turn and kiss a daisy who dances with delight
    A hummingbird sings somber songs of yesterday's forever flight

    Earth's interruption is a sharp ray of sunshine puncturing the canyon's afternoon bubble
    A stream flows and spanks slippery green velvet rocks
    Dangerous dreams dare to evolve
    Dripping in despair diving down doing dreadful things with the demons of the deep

    A fish flying
    A muffled scream swims underneath sinking into caves of sorrow
    Yesterday's premonition is disguised as today's tardy tomorrow
    The sun reluctantly relinquishes control to a submissive quarter moon
    While shadows make love and not quitting anytime soon.
    They drink a cup of melancholy from the earth's warm bending spoon

    His Tulips tingle her Daffodil dazzle
    Eternity drinks yet not swallows their flavor
    Sonya sets sweet soft sail into secret serendipity
    Into his full fragrance
    Her desirous daydreams play in concert with his midnight destination

    Crickets cry and compete for center stage
    Giving pause for a split second sound
    A question asked that needs no explanation
    A one word introduction to an audience of orchids, tulips and daffodil dreams
    Cricket cries with no conductor and resume breathing life into nature's orchestra

    Submitted on 2007-09-17 01:27:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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