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    dots Submission Name: Cloud Dancersdots
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    Author: A Silver Key
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 4/7/29
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Sand Castles in the Sky...


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    dotsCloud Dancersdots
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    The hands on the clock on my wall continue to crawl
    As day turns to night and summer turns to fall

    As the world turns, so does the page
    Youth turns to middle and onto old age

    Why in the world can't time just stand still?
    How did we get up and over this hill?

    How did good morning turn into tomorrow afternoon
    Today the sun and tonight the moon

    Meet me in May and then marry me in June
    Shooting stars are only wishes coming true very soon

    Wishes turn to dreams just out of reach
    Sandy footprints were once majestic sand castles alive on the beach


    I loved you


    More than priests love to preach
    And more than teachers love to teach

    Eternal life will be my greatest endeavor
    Never say never


    Not ever

    When we die
    We'll rendezvous in the sky


    We'll slow dance away from the crowds
    High above the clouds

    In the vicinity
    Of infinity

    Where wishes roam
    And where shooting stars call home

    Where dreams fall into place
    Where eternity’s sea mist kisses your face

    Where four sandy feet dance inside a majestic sand castle never to be washed away




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