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    dots Submission Name: John 2: Booksdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 230/393/145
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       A character that's been running through my head for awhile. Part of a series of poems.


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    dotsJohn 2: Booksdots
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    John fled the city eyes
    and took refuge in libraries
    (books smelling the same
    no matter where you are).

    Sequestered in dim-lit corners,
    he pressed his face against spines
    and dug fingernails into old leather.

    Jane, he whispered,
    Oh God--Jane,
    they still smell like you.




    Submitted on 2007-09-17 01:37:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So John's long dead girlfriend Jane was either an avid book reader or a librarian. After he lost her, his whole world fell apart and he became a transient, a roamer. No matter where he went, though, he could not escape the memory of Jane.

    These three poems you have written are quite interesting. You should write some more. I like them very much. Then again, I always like your poetry.

    Jane, Jane, Jane.
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah! i have read all three now and i must say well done! this (these) are an instant fave now that i have it all together. This is an interesting story. It catches my attention and i want to know what happens next! when you post new installments of this series ecpect comments from me.

    Wonderful Job.
    Misty
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]


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