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John 2: Books


Author: saartha
ASL Info:    27/F/US
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A character that's been running through my head for awhile. Part of a series of poems.


John 2: Books



John fled the city eyes
and took refuge in libraries
(books smelling the same
no matter where you are).

Sequestered in dim-lit corners,
he pressed his face against spines
and dug fingernails into old leather.

Jane, he whispered,
Oh God--Jane,
they still smell like you.




Submitted on 2007-09-17 01:37:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  So John's long dead girlfriend Jane was either an avid book reader or a librarian. After he lost her, his whole world fell apart and he became a transient, a roamer. No matter where he went, though, he could not escape the memory of Jane.

These three poems you have written are quite interesting. You should write some more. I like them very much. Then again, I always like your poetry.

Jane, Jane, Jane.
| Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah! i have read all three now and i must say well done! this (these) are an instant fave now that i have it all together. This is an interesting story. It catches my attention and i want to know what happens next! when you post new installments of this series ecpect comments from me.

Wonderful Job.
Misty
| Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]


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