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    dots Submission Name: John 3: Inkdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 230/390/136
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       A character that's been running through my head for awhile. Part of a series of poems.


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    dotsJohn 3: Inkdots
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    John stole a book (shiny and new
    and not smelling quite right
    but close enough to hurt)
    and scurried through the city streets,
    losing himself in the gaping maw
    of a hazy black alleyway
    that looked a little like home.

    Shaking fingers scrabbled through pages,
    worrying edges and bending corners;
    ‘Forget forget forget’ writhing
    up and down the margins,
    each letter teeming
    with desolation.

    He threw the book into a puddle,
    Ink bleeding and reforming
    ‘Jane Jane Jane…’




    Submitted on 2007-09-17 01:38:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting. It read like a story, which i like very much. I say it was interesting becuase i haven't read the others in the series. I'm going to go do that. So apart from that it was good. I think instead of being a poem you could make it into a story. It could turn out pretty great.
    Let me read the others then i'll know for sure what i think :)

    Misty
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]


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