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    dots Submission Name: Heart Attackdots
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    Author: nolram
    ASL Info:    29/M
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 58/61/33
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 977
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    Bytes: 677



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    dotsHeart Attackdots
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    The girls a heart attack
    ooh I want you back
    by my side tonight
    I don't feel right

    What you want to do
    What you want to say
    I'm in love with you
    you take it all away

    But you know I know
    You know I don't know
    I just want you
    Right here next to me

    What is it that you want
    What is it that you need
    I can see your haunt
    I wish I could be free

    Can't you see I'm dying I mean it
    Maybe I wasn't meant to feel it
    So I'll go to sleep and dream it
    Maybe then I'll find the meaning




    Submitted on 2007-09-17 06:20:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Not bad at all
    I can see this write easily matched to a bass beat in the modern rap style
    You expressed your Love for this person well and I like the fact you split up the rhyme
    Great Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me knowwhat you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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