Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Heart Attackdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: nolram
    ASL Info:    29/M
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 58/61/33
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1095
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 677



    Description:
       Lyrics...


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHeart Attackdots
    -------------------------------------------


    The girls a heart attack
    ooh I want you back
    by my side tonight
    I don't feel right

    What you want to do
    What you want to say
    I'm in love with you
    you take it all away

    But you know I know
    You know I don't know
    I just want you
    Right here next to me

    What is it that you want
    What is it that you need
    I can see your haunt
    I wish I could be free

    Can't you see I'm dying I mean it
    Maybe I wasn't meant to feel it
    So I'll go to sleep and dream it
    Maybe then I'll find the meaning




    Submitted on 2007-09-17 06:20:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Not bad at all
    I can see this write easily matched to a bass beat in the modern rap style
    You expressed your Love for this person well and I like the fact you split up the rhyme
    Great Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me knowwhat you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    149679

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry