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Author: Sharati_hottie
ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86 /81 /90
Words: 97
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This poem is about nothing really, just something that I woke up with. It just seemed like something I should write down, before I lost it for good. I should really write more down, I am starting to get "writer's block" Which really sucks, I wish I could write like I used to. I will try and keep these up, but I don't know how much longer I will be able to.


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He looks at me and calls me crazy,
Everything I see is hazy,
The skies they darken,
The world turns black,
I cannot find my way back,
to the bright and beautiful place,
That I used to see in your face,
Everything that is done,
has been hidden from me for fun,
you told me that I would be,
more than what you mean to me,
I hide my fears so you won't know,
what is bothering me, you know?
I know you love me,
but I still don't see,
how this world will brighten for me.




Submitted on 2007-09-17 07:52:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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