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    dots Submission Name: Hiddendots

    Author: Sharati_hottie
    ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86/81/90
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This poem is about nothing really, just something that I woke up with. It just seemed like something I should write down, before I lost it for good. I should really write more down, I am starting to get "writer's block" Which really sucks, I wish I could write like I used to. I will try and keep these up, but I don't know how much longer I will be able to.

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    He looks at me and calls me crazy,
    Everything I see is hazy,
    The skies they darken,
    The world turns black,
    I cannot find my way back,
    to the bright and beautiful place,
    That I used to see in your face,
    Everything that is done,
    has been hidden from me for fun,
    you told me that I would be,
    more than what you mean to me,
    I hide my fears so you won't know,
    what is bothering me, you know?
    I know you love me,
    but I still don't see,
    how this world will brighten for me.

    Submitted on 2007-09-17 07:52:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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