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    dots Submission Name: A big Disgracedots
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    Author: Sharati_hottie
    ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86/81/90
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1269
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    Description:
       another poem right off the top of my mind....


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    dotsA big Disgracedots
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    He looks at me with a smile and grace,
    And all that I can see in his face,
    Is a heartbroken person,
    who has seen too much,
    he won't let me close so that I can touch,
    his mind with mine, I want to make him happy,
    He looks so sad,
    despite the, happy thoughts,
    I try to make him see what is all around him,
    but the more I try,
    the less he's open,
    To what I place in front of his face,
    Im guessing to him it's a big disgrace.




    Submitted on 2007-09-17 08:22:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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