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    dots Submission Name: To love Againdots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    dotsTo love Againdots
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    I see you from day to day
    Not knowing the words to say

    Even though things aren't as they seem
    Life still doesn't have to be so mean

    This passion i still feel for you
    At times still has me blue

    If i could say i feel
    then i could tell you my love is real

    would you not give us another chance
    just one time this teen romance

    and if things dont work out
    then yes you can go on about

    with this chance i'm willing to take
    i hope this works for my sake

    the love i have for you will never die
    if we fall apart i will sure cry




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      from the two peices ive read of yours thus far, it seems like you have a great sense for the AABB rhyme... again, it flows well, and the emotions portrays are honest, teen emotions. i also like how it is relatively concise with what its saying, which i think helps it keep that real feeling. if this is directed towards a real person, i hope it worked out.

    good write.
    Guermo
    | Posted on 2007-12-22 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]


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