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    dots Submission Name: Soul Madnessdots
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    Author: WD-40
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangleby
    Elite Ratio:    0.95 - 206/72/10
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSoul Madnessdots
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    I can't wake up
    You see, I've lost myself
    completly, not enough
    Rock n Roll

    Solo madness
    ringing in my ears
    roaming through my head

    Soul searching
    Bones and Brains
    I'm missing my flesh

    Wonder stricken
    and restless
    my soul madness




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      I like this one. You made it your own while still being a piece of connection with all who read it. I love the third stanza. It reflected the title; your focus. I apologize that this review is short.
    | Posted on 2007-11-18 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      WD-40 By the way LOVE the name!
    This was a great poem and it was full of life and youth. Great work! Keep it up and I will read more of your stuff for sure.

    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      I like what you've got here - nice touches of sane/insanity (I've often felt this way). I can't explain why, but this feels incomplete to me, like there's a lot more to say here. Not a complaint, just an opinion. Feel free to ignore it.

    Peace, love and all that other junk,,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2007-11-09 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I didn't know Buster could leave a comment like that.

    Anywho, nice here Grim. I like your style of rhetoric. Its well put together.


    Soul
    | Posted on 2007-10-07 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
      well wonderful, extavigant, beatiful. all i can say is that i have not read something like this in a while 40.
    starting with "Soul Madness" as you call it. perfect with the words and all yo. it tells you what you are about to read about good title.

    I can't wake up: now this start of a poem is exactly what this world needs right now i mean its somthing common but not common enough to make a person stop reading the poem after the first line.

    You see, I've lost myself: this second line catches the reader in telling him or her that they need to keep reading. when the reader reads loosing part it makes them think, have i ever lost myself or am i still lost? so its more of the whole "catching the readers attention with relation.

    completly, not enough: now here its doing the oppisite of what the following above says but instead you are telling the reader thAT this maddness is alright and or even that you want more.

    Rock n Roll: and now following the whole liked maddness its sayying that its very liked and my even go out of control. it is interesting how just a few words can mean alot or lead someone to a whole other direction.rock and roll sweet sweet rock and soll my friend that is what it does to a person. also dont take any drugs whislt reading or writig another poem ok, just another friendly heads up

    Solo madness: now solo really makes this maddness into a much greater maddness and makes it seem like some tipe of crime or disease. this also says that you were hurt by a friend or something. by using this solo, one, uni thing tells me that you had some type of grudge that needed to be let out not in rage but in mere madness pure clean madness.

    ringing in my ears: this ringing you refer to as the madness is new to you and you feel it everywhere it gives you this power that you are not used to.this intensity may grow stronger with the rage. its now like a booming in your ear or some tipe of ringing

    roaming through my head: the ringing is not only in your ears it is in your head this simple loss of sanity is going far how much more further can it go?

    Soul searching: at this point your soul is searching but their is no way to stop the madness trap that your brian has fallen into taking your soul and body with it.

    Bones and Brains: now even the bones in your body canfeel the intensity of this madness.

    I'm missing my flesh: your flesh could not take it. it has exploded and all you are left is soul and insanity. well hypethetically speaking.

    Wonder stricken: you have nothing to think of except for everything that has just happened in the last 10 seconds. as it seemed to be hours,

    and restless: now your just restles thinking what had just happened.

    my soul madness: this is your soul madness

    translated by: Fana salik (=
    | Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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