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    dots Submission Name: Real Beauty dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Passion
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       I wrote this on Aug 20th of this year....


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    We wonder why these things happen
    We hold on to what…to who we can.

    As these things consume us to some degree
    We lie in our beds at night re-thinking our day
    And the events that transpired within these days that pass us by.

    Some things bring tears to our eyes
    We roll over into our pillows and cry
    (We’ve all done it)

    Other things… bring smiles to our faces
    And butterflies to our stomachs

    Yet we still wonder why these things happen
    Do we… Do you?

    Ever wonder what’s going on to others?
    Why they may hurt?
    Why they may feel the same pain you and I do?

    Why there are…
    Hungry Children
    Abusive Parents
    Sex Offenders?

    Why would such a great and amazing God
    Allow so much pain and hurt to happen?

    Do you ever go searching for these…?
    For the answers?

    Maybe it's imperfection that is the real beauty,
    Within this world we all live in.

    Although there is no beauty from …
    Hungry Children
    Abusive Parents
    Or Sex Offenders

    Maybe, just maybe the beauty lies beyond the human eyes!
    Maybe it’s the justice received?

    The food that is fed to those hungry little tummies
    Abusive parents getting the needed help
    And those sex offenders caught and tried for their wrongful actions

    Although there are nasty things that live, breathe and sleep within our world.
    Although we cannot feed every starving child
    Or stop all abusive parents
    And catch all the sex offenders

    We are getting closer everyday…
    With everyone’s help and support!




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      Haha, I'm glad beauty is on the inside as well, if it was on the outside I'd be ****ed. Haha, good poem/write. Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool, nice write, we'll get them goddamn sex offenders, haha. Anyway, it's a cool poem, justice is beauty, especially when you see them go to prison, but if God exists maybe he's just lazy, heheh. Laters, Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent questions, and an excellent, contemplative composition that we would all do well to read and think on!!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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