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    dots Submission Name: thanks for being such a good friend.dots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
    Total Views: 1079
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsthanks for being such a good friend.dots
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    Your not worth the salt in my tears.
    Your not worth me saving you from your fears.
    Your not worth any of my dimes.
    Your not worth any of these song's rhymes.

    All of the years we've known each other.
    Why did I even bother?
    I was mistreated.
    And emotionally beated.
    Thanks for being such a good friend.

    Your not worth the salt in my tears.
    Your not worth me saving you from your fears.
    Your not worth any of my dimes.
    Your not worth any of these song's rhymes.

    Everytime you cried.
    I'd put everything aside.
    My advice was worthless to you.
    Because you were so untrue.

    Your not worth the salt in my tears.
    Your not worth me saving you from your fears.
    Your not worth any of my dimes.
    Your not worth any of these song's rhymes.

    And every line.
    Is designed.
    To leave you falling to the floor.
    Cause you couldn't take this anymore.

    Your not worth the salt in my tears.
    Your not worth me saving you from your fears.
    Your not worth any of my dimes.
    Your not worth any of these song's rhymes.
    Thanks for being SUCH a great friend.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Yep... No kidding I have had friends like that before too My best friend even did something like that to me... Known her for 12 years, and she betrayed my trust = I'm so sad for you and pray that you'll feel better from whatever has happened in your life... The poem itself was well constructed and shows the emotions through and through

    -Sere
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by Lil Sere | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate it when friends turn out that way. It is so sad sometimes but a very good write.
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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