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    dots Submission Name: fingers.dots

    Author: Rhaine
    ASL Info:    25/Yes/An Alley
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 660/744/196
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Swollen fingers
    Almost bleeding
    My nails are bent up and breaking
    Keeping this rhythm up
    So it doesnít get lost in my head
    At first it was just annoying burning feeling
    Now I canít feel them anymore

    So I keep tapping them on the chair

    Splattered with paint
    Blue is the color
    Back when I wanted to re-decorate every week
    Mahogany, chipped, scratched
    Worn down over the years

    I can feel my bones hitting against it
    Like theyíre about to come through the skin

    The sound is repulsive to me
    But I donít want it to get lost in my mind
    Because once it is gone
    It will never come back

    My feet are cold
    The floor is uneven
    And hard

    In a way I am waiting for something to happen
    So it will just fly out of my mind
    And I donít have to keep this bullshit up

    But I canít

    So here I am tapping my fingers
    Over and over
    It will never stop until I get it out

    My eyes are swollen
    But too Iím too tired to sleep

    The cold is creeping up to my arms
    And my hands have gone numb

    And Iím still sitting here tapping my fingers.

    Submitted on 2007-09-18 04:00:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was actually really good...at first i didn't know if it would go anywhere but then i kept reading giving it a chance and it was worth it...but you should work on explaining yourself a little better..that's all....about what you're trying to get out but other than that very good..it sounds like an old poem i heard once
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by taintedsmiles | [ Reply to This ]

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