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    dots Submission Name: Burning Twisting Dying Spritedots
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    Author: AptPupilofLife2
    ASL Info:    18/M/Berkeley,CA
    Elite Ratio:    6.79 - 113/131/48
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 158
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    dotsBurning Twisting Dying Spritedots
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    Burning, Twisting, Dying sprite
    Double ended candles end tonight
    And betwixt desperate laughs
    And no-chance stands
    No one will wonder
    At your clenched hands

    And eyes
    And ears
    And heart.

    But before the one last cancerous orgasm wrecked your skeletal frame

    you sighed

    and began your new candle.
    Having burnt both left and right,
    you built this one below
    and savoring the agony of creation
    you promised to burn it slow.

    And in this brightest flame we find
    A burning, loving, trying sprite
    Never quite sure if she’s escaped that night.
    But she has.




    Submitted on 2007-09-18 04:52:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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