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    dots Submission Name: Moon Spelldots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMoon Spelldots

    Ah, so cold the lake!
    Here I chant a rune
    My lost love to take
    With me to the Moon.

    From the midnight brake
    Dreams across this lawn
    Circle round the lake
    Disappear at dawn.

    I call--hear no word,
    But the frightened drake
    Fleeing can be heard
    All across the lake.

    Will he come again?
    Will my rune awake
    Him, of all lost men
    Drowned within this lake?

    Will the stars remake,
    Out of realms untold,
    Love from out the lake
    Robed in beaten gold?

    He, up from the lake,
    Watery cocoon,
    His cold hand I take
    To the opal Moon!

    Submitted on 2007-09-18 08:28:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a hauting piece... it transports me into the depths of an emotional lake and leaves me wiping tears from downcast eyes as I slowly spiral down to my watery realms with a final wave of my iridescent tail...
    | Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]

    Why, oh why, does it, goodness gracious, make me think about The swan lake? A strange poem I'd say. Beautiful in its strange and intriguing mystery. Excellent rhyme!
    I rarely read poems twice unless they're my own. I cannot pinpoint as to the reason this poem feels so welcoming to me but it truly does. It entices me to dream
    and that's what all is always about.


    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      The enchantment of the lake, and the spell of the Moon! Exquisite and outstanding subjects, and a delightful poem! Well penned and well done, my able and scholarly friend!
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      0_0 UUhhhhh, wowies, I like this one it has a wounderful imagary that moves in away that keeps the rythm moving. Loves it,
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by BrokenNexava | [ Reply to This ]

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