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    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    We all look to someone to give us strength
    Lord give me strength
    My love show me strength
    I pray for all of this
    In need we always look for someone
    Someone else
    We pray for someone to take our needs
    Our pain
    Our hope
    We just pray for something
    Give me it
    Take it
    Why can’t I have it?
    Let us speak to our only ones
    Our only safe haven
    The one we look to
    The one…
    The one who may help us
    That one is us
    He helps us to be us
    Or he helps us to whatever
    Or he is nothing?
    Your choice…
    Life need someone.




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      Mmm... God gives, helps, and loves - Always and forever No matter what, He is always there watching us, and He's willing to help if we only ask for it and trust Him. And we must always have faith that He will always be there to help us do everything Very good poem - I liked the way it's set up and kinda makes ya think Keep it up

    -Sere
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by Lil Sere | [ Reply to This ]


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