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    dots Submission Name: her wrists are cutdots
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    Author: tainted-faerie
    ASL Info:    18/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 12/16/25
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsher wrists are cutdots
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    Her wrists are cut
    sore and bare,
    she's looking death in the face
    yet she isn't scared.
    This is what she's wanted
    all along,
    there's noone stopping her now
    she's all alone.
    Laying in pain
    she's on the bed,
    she tried moving past it
    but she coulnd't get ahead.
    "Take me now" she whispers
    under her breath,
    she's arguing with god now
    she wants him to show her death.
    If she awakes from this night
    she'll do it again
    she'll continue her pain
    until her life comes to an end.
    Nothing is helping
    and nother ever will,
    so she's turning to the old habits
    of the razors and the pills.
    That last hit from him
    put her over the edge,
    she's not taking it anymore
    so to her life she's putting an end.
    So this is her last goodbye
    and her farewell,
    she's drifting off now,
    she's finally meeting the gates of hell.




    Submitted on 2007-09-18 10:12:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very interesting. I like how you are describing just a character rather than talking about it in reference to yourself. A lot of people do that and it is annoying to read suicide poetry but this is less like that and more like a story. Good job.
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that.. At first I thought you were leaning towards going to Heaven even after she had killed herself.. but the Bible says ( i know.. it says a lot of things)
    ANYWAYS!
    It says if you kill yourself, you are denied Heaven.
    So the end was good for me.
    Good write.
    ~*KAT*~
    | Posted on 2007-10-10 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]


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