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    dots Submission Name: Mind's Eyedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 678
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 707



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       You can try and understand this, and maybe you will get some pieces right, but I doubt you can figure it out. Just find out what it means to you I guess.


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    dotsMind's Eyedots
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    The shadows beckon me
    I ignore their shouts
    The darkness engulfs me
    I break free
    The lights fade
    It's stalking me
    I sprint to cover
    I reach for help
    My eyes are closed
    My heart is open
    Yet I feel nothing
    But I hear it all
    You don't need light when you're blind
    You don't need touch when you're numb
    But I will always hear it
    Even when nothing is there
    In my mind's eye I can see
    Sound is tangible
    Your hands are cold
    You can close your eyes
    You can numb your heart
    You can block your ears
    But you can't seal your mind.




    Submitted on 2007-09-18 10:44:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like it...it flows well and is very well written...i was very happy to read it and it sounds like it has lots of meaning
    | Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by InYuco Katan | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my, very nice. It is moving in the manner that it has a flow to it. The movement in the piece is like a stream, giving just enough to keep you moving but not enough to give it way until the end. wonderfuly done,
    Nexava
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by BrokenNexava | [ Reply to This ]


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