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    dots Submission Name: hands of fatedots
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    Author: Sharati_hottie
    ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86/81/90
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
    Total Views: 1189
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       DAMN MY BOYFRIEND TO HELL FOR GETTING ME TO THINK ABOUT ALIENS


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    the hands of fate decide my future
    they even find me the "perfect" suture
    They see everything I am supposed to be
    and they tell me not to worry
    about what is to happen in my life
    that all that goes wrong and all the strife
    will lead to greatness and so much more
    though for the longest time it'll seem a bore
    but I should not worry, that they say
    They tell me I will be okay
    Then I tell them the vision I had
    About when I turn 25 it's bad
    Even more so to me because of my health
    But they tell me that I will come into wealth
    They tell me that the "perfect man"
    is nothing like the way I am
    That he is country born and bred
    I made a joke and asked if his neck was red
    they did not think that I was funny
    they tried again to speak about money
    I do not care about the moeny I say
    they don't care, although I may
    The hands of fate control my life
    they are filling mine with so much strife
    I think that they are failing in
    all the things I think are alien




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