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    dots Submission Name: Danielledots
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    Author: Sharati_hottie
    ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86/81/90
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsDanielledots
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    he comes home and smells of sex
    I soon find out he was with his ex
    the of which he told me he hated
    And I see that I have been bated
    I guess again I am going through hell
    He made me feel like a bell
    Like I was the only one that mattered
    now I feel as though Im tattered
    I found out that he was in love
    with her not me his love from above
    his ex and mother of his kids
    soon I will start taking bids
    on how quick he will change and throw me out
    I am sure he will blame the gout
    The medical problem that he has
    I know Im acting like a spazz
    I know that I sound like a conspiriter
    but he seems so dear to her
    I am sick of having my head messed with
    I guess it's time for her to be hid




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