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Author: Sharati_hottie
ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86 /81 /90
Words: 155
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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he comes home and smells of sex
I soon find out he was with his ex
the of which he told me he hated
And I see that I have been bated
I guess again I am going through hell
He made me feel like a bell
Like I was the only one that mattered
now I feel as though Im tattered
I found out that he was in love
with her not me his love from above
his ex and mother of his kids
soon I will start taking bids
on how quick he will change and throw me out
I am sure he will blame the gout
The medical problem that he has
I know Im acting like a spazz
I know that I sound like a conspiriter
but he seems so dear to her
I am sick of having my head messed with
I guess it's time for her to be hid

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