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    dots Submission Name: No reason to crydots

    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       i know this is probly a mess but im not feeling good so im not gonna finish it. i like any errors that are there and what i was thinking sorry if this is a disapointment to you.

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    dotsNo reason to crydots

    ive told myself a thousand times,
    i wrote over a thousand rymes,

    and yet i dont have the words,
    to exsplain how much it hurts.

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      Although this is a short write this isd so Honest its almost scary
    You dont have to write about true emotion in a poem that is a mistake I made for a very long time
    I will always believe the more touching and truly emotional writes are based on true experiences
    You really made me take a stronger look at my own style of writing with these short words
    Very good thought provoking write
    God Bless
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      hey....although it was a very short read....i very much understand...i know what you feel and i see why it's so short...the poem says it all...this was showing that you more so have given up or trying to write what you feel because you've already said it so many times ... but in the end you'll find yourself writing about the smae old stuff in a few day or even hours hell i don't know...but don't ever give up..just write what you feel through description...don't just give up
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by taintedsmiles | [ Reply to This ]
      well, let me tell you that at least you rhymed in this writing , and writing is not only rhyming, so that "writing" looks like a part of a hip hopper's song, lol. That is true! so well you have to give more details to your wiritng more scenes i mean more atmospherical issues that attracts toyou readers, some symbolism and something like that. Because when i read it, i thought "is he writing or just speaking?" I hope you can get what i try to tell you. and i hope you can do it better next time, keep writing, and thanks for sharing it would help you. and if you have time please take a look to my writings.
    peace and love
    and have a nice day
    | Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]

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