Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Emotions Float Awaydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 602
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 464



    Description:
       I hadn't planned on submitting anything else today, but purplesun24 asked if i would, so here it is.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsEmotions Float Awaydots
    -------------------------------------------


    It's as though you were drunk on madne,
    but you're not drunk or mad.
    You're only saying what I've wanted so long to hear,
    but I fear that it'll wear off
    like the silliness that cheap wine brings,
    so I'll hold onto this moment
    as if my mind were a vise
    and hope it stays there,
    for sometimes emotions float away
    like the final butterfly in autumn.






    Submitted on 2004-06-21 19:27:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      "For sometimes emotions float away
    Like the final butterfly in autumn"
    so very true.
    this is how it is. it takes time to say, "i love you". but it must have been said with passion and feeling regardless. it's wonderful actually, because it might have been worth waiting awhile, because nowadays the three words get thrown out a lot with no empathy. some people say they love each other with 2 weeks or less of going out, and that is rather an upseting fact, unless they have fallen head over heels which is a possibilty. i fancy this very much. it was short, bittersweet, and comprehensible. you don't even need to point out what is meant to be said by the person.

    ps: you're very pretty as i said before, and don't listen to anyone who thinks otherwise. (read your entry) Take care.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      I've been in a slightly 'Duh' state for the past couple of days. I read and re-read but I really don't understand this poem at all. I'd really appreciate if you could explain.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Doesn't the final butterfly just drop dead to the ground? Well I'm glad I finally said what you've been waiting to here, but I have to tell you that I AM drunk. Maybe even mad. Errr! But not self-centered even in the least. Doesn't cheap wine sound like such a cheap cliché' these days? From what I have witnessed, all beverages laced with alcohol make women silly. Not a bad write, though.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the end. that's such a beautiful image. it's a very sad piece but I enjoyed reading it nonetheless. it's beautifully sad. great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      the sentiment of the cheap wine and how what is said can fade along with it sometimes, nothing truer has been said today! i am sorry to even say that years ago i probably did the very same thing; something i am not proud of. besides that, this poem expressed that need to want it to be real. to hold on to it, like you said, like a vise (i think that's how it's spelled, if you meant the carpenter-type thing). i like the butteryfly at the end, too. autumn is my favorite season, and i hate to see it go! glad you posted this!
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks agian for submitting something...just needed something refreshing to read...i like the line about the cheap wine...and the last two lines...heck i like it all..i swear if i added all the poems i liked of your to my favs...it would be crazy...well i guess ill just have to wait for the book...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    14981

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Keep written by TheStillSilence
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Gaia written by endlessgame23
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Live In Between written by teika5
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Dream written by closetpoet
    Rooted in Nature written by Chelebel
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    The World written by jjd
    Lie back & tan written by Daniel Barlow
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Loop-di-Loop written by endlessgame23
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Mystery Read written by kyserin

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry