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    dots Submission Name: Emotions Float Awaydots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I hadn't planned on submitting anything else today, but purplesun24 asked if i would, so here it is.


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    It's as though you were drunk on madne,
    but you're not drunk or mad.
    You're only saying what I've wanted so long to hear,
    but I fear that it'll wear off
    like the silliness that cheap wine brings,
    so I'll hold onto this moment
    as if my mind were a vise
    and hope it stays there,
    for sometimes emotions float away
    like the final butterfly in autumn.






    Submitted on 2004-06-21 19:27:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "For sometimes emotions float away
    Like the final butterfly in autumn"
    so very true.
    this is how it is. it takes time to say, "i love you". but it must have been said with passion and feeling regardless. it's wonderful actually, because it might have been worth waiting awhile, because nowadays the three words get thrown out a lot with no empathy. some people say they love each other with 2 weeks or less of going out, and that is rather an upseting fact, unless they have fallen head over heels which is a possibilty. i fancy this very much. it was short, bittersweet, and comprehensible. you don't even need to point out what is meant to be said by the person.

    ps: you're very pretty as i said before, and don't listen to anyone who thinks otherwise. (read your entry) Take care.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]
      I've been in a slightly 'Duh' state for the past couple of days. I read and re-read but I really don't understand this poem at all. I'd really appreciate if you could explain.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Doesn't the final butterfly just drop dead to the ground? Well I'm glad I finally said what you've been waiting to here, but I have to tell you that I AM drunk. Maybe even mad. Errr! But not self-centered even in the least. Doesn't cheap wine sound like such a cheap cliché' these days? From what I have witnessed, all beverages laced with alcohol make women silly. Not a bad write, though.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the end. that's such a beautiful image. it's a very sad piece but I enjoyed reading it nonetheless. it's beautifully sad. great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      the sentiment of the cheap wine and how what is said can fade along with it sometimes, nothing truer has been said today! i am sorry to even say that years ago i probably did the very same thing; something i am not proud of. besides that, this poem expressed that need to want it to be real. to hold on to it, like you said, like a vise (i think that's how it's spelled, if you meant the carpenter-type thing). i like the butteryfly at the end, too. autumn is my favorite season, and i hate to see it go! glad you posted this!
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks agian for submitting something...just needed something refreshing to read...i like the line about the cheap wine...and the last two lines...heck i like it all..i swear if i added all the poems i liked of your to my favs...it would be crazy...well i guess ill just have to wait for the book...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]


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