Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Timedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 750
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 729



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsTimedots
    -------------------------------------------


    I have been crying inside
    For some time
    She mends my wounds

    When I'm not reduced to
    Alone time
    My smile shines through

    When she comes around
    I want to stop time
    I relish the new

    A few hours after dusk
    I know there is no time
    She's leaving soon

    Maybe she will stay
    This time
    Then my smile would too

    Don't want to press the issue
    And lose time
    Have to start anew

    Does she cry inside
    But in our time
    Her smile seems to bloom

    I'd rather there be no change
    Than risk next time
    What I have with you




    Submitted on 2007-09-19 18:14:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, I really really like this. I like the structure, I like the mood, I like the theme, I like this alot. Dont really have anything bad to say, so I wont.
    Josh
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    149816

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    no words for how graceful you are in this moment written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Shut Up written by annie0888
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Carry written by saartha
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    a safe place written by Daniel Barlow
    prison written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Fasade written by jackz
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Formal Jen written by Daniel Barlow
    To the Devil and Candle written by HisNameIsNoMore
    an unashamed poverty written by Daniel Barlow
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Silent Screams In Silent Dreams written by poetotoe
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Every..... written by jackz
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Etiquette written by saartha
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry