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    dots Submission Name: Timedots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 759
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    I have been crying inside
    For some time
    She mends my wounds

    When I'm not reduced to
    Alone time
    My smile shines through

    When she comes around
    I want to stop time
    I relish the new

    A few hours after dusk
    I know there is no time
    She's leaving soon

    Maybe she will stay
    This time
    Then my smile would too

    Don't want to press the issue
    And lose time
    Have to start anew

    Does she cry inside
    But in our time
    Her smile seems to bloom

    I'd rather there be no change
    Than risk next time
    What I have with you

    Submitted on 2007-09-19 18:14:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I really really like this. I like the structure, I like the mood, I like the theme, I like this alot. Dont really have anything bad to say, so I wont.
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]

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