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    dots Submission Name: Forgivenessdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 744
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1823



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       My thoughts, no underlying meaning, no symbolism, little structure. Just my thoughts.


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    Forgiveness is a virtue
    One everyone should exercise
    Some things are simple
    Others seem impossible

    I am fairly forgiving
    But it isn't always easy
    If she poisoned him
    Like I think she did

    How can I forgive her
    Would dad forgive her
    If she's the reason he's gone
    If it's her fault

    I wanted to tell her
    She's a bad person
    Before he died
    Maybe I sensed it

    I try not to hate her
    Or wish bad of her
    It was the drugs
    They destroy everyone

    He stayed for the little girl
    Who wasn't really his
    And for his son
    My half brother

    Did he sense it
    I doubt he would have left
    He would have tried
    To give the children hope

    A life she could never give
    The gift he wanted her to have
    He was miserable
    But he loved them

    He loved her, for some reason
    And he loved my little brother
    And he loved my litter sister
    I don't wish her bad

    Unless that is their only hope
    I want to preserve his belongings
    His most treasured possessions
    I want them to have a chance

    She would pawn everything
    She can't raise them
    She has already lost one child
    She shouldn't have the others

    Maybe she should be in prison
    Maybe that would fix things
    Not my place to judge
    God will choose

    Have mercy on her
    Or judge her
    I try not to hate her
    I love my daddy

    I love my siblings
    God help me
    I don't want to feel hate
    Help me to forgive




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      It kind of is a poem, but it's like a rant/poem.
    | Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by BlazeFlamme | [ Reply to This ]
      also *crys* that is really touching .. How you are trying to forgive her .. I also am trying to forgive people in my life. I Love how you talk about him ... because I only met him twice and knew right away that his kids where his world..... He seemed like such a positive and forgiving person. wish i could have known him better.
    | Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by Secret_callie | [ Reply to This ]
      *crys* that is a good poem... forgiveness is not easy but it is the right thing to do. I know he is in a better place today smiling down on you. I know he would be happy to see how much you have grown. Try to forgive her, you know he would. He has done it before and would do anything for those kids. He loves all of you and your hear will mend. Justs give it time. Time is all it will take. God will see she is judged, that is her fate. If she did it, she is in for a rude awake... i kinda made this into a poem...sorry...it just kinda flowed...but this will all work out in the end.
    | Posted on 2007-09-19 00:00:00 | by InYuco Katan | [ Reply to This ]


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