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    dots Submission Name: "pain is life, as life is love".dots
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    Author: Magger32
    ASL Info:    18-female-PA.
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 53/131/124
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 920
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    Description:
       I really messed up with a guy I truly cherished, honored, and loved. All in all for me, pain is love. There is so different way to live for me, but alone and in confusion.




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    dots"pain is life, as life is love".dots
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    There is no difference between pain and life for me.
    My heart is trapped, the pain never freed.
    I hate this life…
    It was made just to make me bleed…
    In pain.

    I feel you’re hurt.
    The pain concealed behind your blue eyes.
    I look up to the sky,
    Rain runs with my tears as I silently cry.

    Why god?!!
    Why won’t you just let me die?
    I want to lose this battle against time.

    I should be dead by now!
    For all my sins;
    The tears you brush away.
    For the pain I made you feel today…
    I am sorry.




    Submitted on 2007-09-19 20:37:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed this write for its candidness and spiritual confession. The opening line speaks volumes to the truth about pain and life. For what would our existence be without pain? How would anyone understand joy without it?

    The epiphany in this piece turns on the question about why God does not strike you dead? Perhaps there is more to pain than suffering?

    A very thought-provoking write.
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      i once read that a poem is never finished just abandoned... and i go by this quote with both what i write and what i read... you might wonder why i started this critque in such a way but i just wanted to let you know my mind set before reading this...

    now i liked this one and i have to wonder about the frequency in which you post your writings... and i feel like maybe you'd get more writes like this if you sat and tweaked one then just writing as many as you can and seeing what some jack off (who just wants you to comment on what they wrote) has to say.
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by medusa | [ Reply to This ]


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