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    dots Submission Name: happynessdots
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    Author: Rhaine
    ASL Info:    25/Yes/An Alley
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 660/744/196
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 671
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       idc what you say.
    poetry isnt about pleasing others
    its about getting out how you feel
    and for certain people who just can except that
    fuck you


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    dotshappynessdots
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    being happy again,
    is only a sentence away.
    i need to hear you say that you were wrong.
    that you were just upset.

    i want to see the pain in your face,
    as you sit here,
    wondering what my response will be.


    as i look around, uncomfortably
    i'd love to see your hopes shatter.
    i want you to hurt like i did
    sob as much as i did
    feel like you just can't go on.


    after all that you caused me to feel,
    of course i would take you back.




    because i love you.

    you know that.





    Submitted on 2007-09-19 22:12:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This write is so true and so deeply personal
    With this write you opened up a window to your soul and showed us your readers the true Rhaine
    You showed in this write you can forgive and that my Friend is the first step to recapturing a broken heart
    Great Job with this
    God Bless
    Ron
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, i think it's sweet.

    I hope everything works out for you.

    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      While I do very much agree with the fact that you cannot stuff poetry within a mould, rate it, give it specific definition or critique to the raw emotion from which it was forged, for yourself recognize that people read it to strive to understand you, they actually read it to feel your feelings. To post it on here, thrown bare to critique, naked for the judge in an "unspecified" manor, you have contradicted yourself. Your description thwarts the very poem. If you use poetry to express yourself, but post it to get critique, but don't give a "f***" what people say, it loses a certain majesty to the writer has in the voice of the poem. We say anything because we care about what you have here stated in your poem, because it is a treasure that you captured. Please dont always assume the worst of the reader. We read it in care! :)
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by ladyofshalott | [ Reply to This ]
      if you really didn't care what people said or if they liked it you wouldn't have posted anything... nor would you have given such a sweet intro...

    this is most definitely a prose piece... it was written nicely i guess, i got the anger and hurt... but honestly when reading it i was only barely thinking about what was written becuz my mind was still stuck on the descrip... it specific people comment on your [censored] in a way that you don't like, delete the comment and send them that message... there are some of us on here that wouold rather just read mind sets and poetry w/o the h.s. drama.

    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by medusa | [ Reply to This ]


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