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    dots Submission Name: No Wastingdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 532
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    Bytes: 405



    Description:
       Sushi town.


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    dotsNo Wastingdots
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    I replace my past memory of this place
    by sitting not in a booth but a chair.
    My brother smiles with his bearded face,
    and says, "By the way, I like your hair."

    I am inexperienced when it comes all this
    dreadful wasabi and terrifying fish.
    My brother points out the sign on the bar,
    "Must eat all sushi rice! No wasting at arr!"




    Submitted on 2007-09-20 02:26:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha. They always get you with the sushi rice. They start packing it on the more you eat, and you get filled up...but somehow, it's always worth it. Just gotta make sure you eat at a place that got an "A" rating from the health inspectors. Don't ask..bad experience in downtown LA.
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]


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