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    dots Submission Name: I Appreciate Endings Now...dots

    Author: moonlitsky
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 70/44/15
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI Appreciate Endings Now...dots

    There is a memory
    That resurfaces every now and then
    Of you never letting me down
    You doing everything in your power
    To catch a glimpse from the corner of your eye
    Of me
    Of you whispering
    Three words
    That filled my soul
    With joy
    And most of all love
    Every single time

    But like the ink
    Of your letters
    My certainty somehow faded
    To nothing more than middle ground grays
    Now the only joy I have
    Is knowing you haven’t left
    But are you really here?
    How I wait each night
    For your reassurance
    …that message has yet to reach me.
    All I wish is that this romantic tragedy
    Weren’t open-ended.

    Submitted on 2007-09-20 10:04:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i disagree with previous the idea of single word lines...i think they are often important in focusing on that one word and its importance.

    i especially like the line about "middle ground grays"

    and i like the sense of this poem...i think something is happening to us..we are losing that spark, that connection...

    we are fading...
    please tell me it is my imagination...

    and that we are okay...

    this piece makes me reminisce...and relate..

    | Posted on 2011-09-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      it was a good poem. i want to tell you that before i start telling you what i didnt like.

    im not one for one word lines. i dont know they kinda dont work for me. i think that it makes more of an imperssion if you have at least two or more words per line. i dont know. just some thing for you tho think about.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]

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