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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 509
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    two explanations


    pale not the earnest heart,
    which has no way of beating,
    lest is stop.
    nor in viking savagery,
    cut away the parts that gather
    to your touch.

    in honest hands,
    let tender mercy hold thy way.
    which in loves past pursuits
    has lost, & relost
    what took it to this place.

    with all heart lips
    may lovers tongues be solicitous still.
    & yielding to the breath
    that we expel.
    so that in some reverent possibility
    our skin might touch again

    & again

    in endless, subtle futures
    where our faces meet
    as two explanations
    to the same thought.





    Submitted on 2007-09-20 12:35:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I read and re-read to capture more of your intended meaning and appreciate more fully how the stanzas progressed from heart to hands to lips. Your final lines, "where our faces meetas two explanations to the same thought," made me ponder how true it is that men and women do not think alike even when each is searching after the elusive feeling of love.
    I enjoyed your poem and thank you for getting my brain in gear on this late Friday evening! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful...as it flows!....
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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