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    dots Submission Name: A Little Poisondots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA Little Poisondots
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    You're like a little poison
    Injected into my veins
    I know that you're not good for me
    You only cause me pain

    You're like a little parasite
    That has crept beneath my skin
    I've only had you once
    But I yearn to feel it again

    You're just a slight obsession
    I want you because you're there
    Dancing barely beyond my reach
    Whispering, "Touch me if you dare"

    You're just a little itch
    And scratch you, I must
    An urge beyond my understanding
    You cloud my mind with lust

    You're just a little poison
    And I had to have a taste
    I turn the bottle up once more
    Can't let this madness go to waste.




    Submitted on 2007-09-20 19:58:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah, poison.

    Addiction.

    Obsession.

    love the Way they all collide.

    nice Write!
    ~Karie
    | Posted on 2007-10-20 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      lovely
    addiction is so beautifull horrid, isnt it?
    | Posted on 2007-09-26 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Every relationship has so many moods that often feel as though they've been bottled just for our consumption but the bottles are provided in random order and are not always available according to our wishes and desires. The occasional sip of poison is that source of danger that titilates and spurs us on.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful work, I feel your sort of "love hate" realtionship you describe here.
    I Think its a gift when a poem becomes as easy as this one is to read,
    You know what they say "What does not kill you can only make you stronger"
    So maybe that poison will end out to work in your advantage.
    Anyways; thats one of my little life guide lines that I follow.

    Nice write.

    Love Matt.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem! It's clever, with great satirical humor. Poison, parasite, obsession, itch, poison left a trail that can only lead to lusty madness. Just keep some antidote handy! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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