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    dots Submission Name: Oscardots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    Description:
       To my Great Grandfather Oscar Herbert


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    dotsOscardots
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    Peace come to the old,
    Wrinkles on their faces Godís perfect mold.
    Shaky hands from the strength which was stole.
    Fragile tongues tell tales of woven gold.
    No longer balding from hair that wonít hold.
    Memories of vacations in grand sombreros.
    Even now that his bodyís grown cold,
    All these ethereal images remain whole.




    Submitted on 2004-02-04 13:43:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice imagery... now everytime i see an old person i will think of this! love the last 2 lines, it really completes the poem! brings everything together!
    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful soulraven. I always read your posts,and am always impressed by the images and the variety and depth of of your thoughts. But much of what I have read is lacking ina little something..here and ther needs some polish; perhaps a slightly different word, or the meter doesnt scan quite right...I always read them though because they are beautiful, and have so much potentila..the proverbial diamond in the rough. Here though, you have transcended that and wrought a very beautiful tribute to Oscar, and by extension to the aged everywhere. Thanks, silver
    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Much much more talent ehibited in this one Soulraven... aboslutely marvelous... I knew you had been holding back... I love this one
    | Posted on 2004-02-04 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]


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