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    dots Submission Name: Why People suckdots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 450/419/172
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 329
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 684



    Description:
       technically its a fuck off poem


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    dotsWhy People suckdots
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    You have no control.
    I say what I say
    I eat when I eat
    I play when I play

    I can disprove every effin word
    that spills over from your mouth
    I can disagree with every single
    neanderthal unfounded unwarrented opinion

    It's no ones buisness
    how much or how little food
    I put in my body
    10 lbs
    10 lbs shrank off my body
    thats a good thing.


    Immature, my ass.
    I can be all I want
    When I want.
    I am Just as smart.


    I say what I say
    I eat when I eat
    I play when I play
    just leave me alone.




    Submitted on 2007-09-21 09:23:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my GRRRRL.

    my little lioness.

    keep roaring, Kitten.

    you make me proud.

    love and kisses,
    hugz n misses,

    Momma
    | Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      Well done. I disagree with the other comments concerning the language. "Effin" worked the other wouldn't. It would have only distracted from the flow of the poem.
    | Posted on 2007-09-27 00:00:00 | by nsc | [ Reply to This ]
      I'd have to agree with the previous commenter, if you want to use a swear word because it fits your work, just use it, you know?

    I like the whole feel of this poem and your attitude.. re minds me of my teenager years that are not so far behind me :)
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]
      just hope you're not bulemic or something. nice statement of who you are. strong work. good job here. only change i'd make would be to use 'f*cking' in place of 'effin' - if you're gonna say, say it, ya know?
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]



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