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    dots Submission Name: Euphoric Aciddots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsEuphoric Aciddots
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    I take my steps carefully,
    Snap the pen with paper,
    I breathe heavy, every breath of me,
    Turns to vapor,
    The cold chill, so ill,
    I smile at what Iíve done,
    The dayís finished,
    My rhymes found their pun,
    But every time I smile,
    Somebody has to steal it,
    A second or a third bar,
    Makes you start to feel it,
    I hate the cop-cats,
    The never original,
    Wish they would stop that,
    Cause itís never subliminal!
    Iím never spittin, when
    Iím rippin a beat, cause Iím a poet,
    And when you read, or I speak,
    The truth, then you know it,
    Sometimes peopleís rhymes,
    Are fake, and they show it,
    By the way they copy and paste,
    The bars that we loaded,
    Itís hard to control it,
    Or console who ever wrote it,
    We take it personally,
    And are we ever quoted?
    No, and who are they?
    Act as if they encode it.
    We have smiled in the face,
    Of the tears that weíve wrote,
    And our greatest fear, is it coming out,
    Of someone elseís throat,
    Like their pain drives,
    The pen that we handle,
    When the steal, itís our name,
    They dismantle,
    Euphoric Acid,
    The good and bad of poetry,
    Hopefully, copying,
    Stealing, will no more beÖ




    Submitted on 2007-09-21 12:04:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hummm interresting mood. Actually, whenever I post a poem online I always have that fear "What if someone else copies it??" I know exactly how you feel!
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]


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