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    dots Submission Name: "Once Upon A Tear"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 902
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    Description:
       This is a sequel to "Long Ago And Far Away", which is posted here at my site. It was posted last year, so is near the bottom of my posts.


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    dots"Once Upon A Tear"dots
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    A loving teardrop fell
    on the aging photograph,
    and stained a handsome, smiling face,
    a picture from the past.

    She gently touched the fading Rose
    pressed lovingly by his face,
    in the weathered and aging album
    she kept in a special place.

    He was her wartime lover
    from a war so long ago.
    It was the war to end all wars,
    or at least they told them so.

    He had left the Rose on his last day
    of a hard earned, last furlough;
    they had embraced for a desperate hour,
    before he had to go.

    And, in leaving her, he smiled
    and promised to return.
    His entire unit was overrun
    was what she later learned.

    She later bore a handsome son
    who looked just like his dad,
    with auburn hair and smiling face
    he was a princely, handsome lad.

    She had never chosen to marry,
    though it had been many a year,
    her heart stopped once upon a time,
    and once upon a tear.

    Ron Cole
    September 2007




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      Ron this is so beautiful and filled with a steadfast love that never died. It touches my heart in a way that makes me feel a twinge of longing in my own heart. Keep writing and don't forget me when you get published I want a signed copy.
    | Posted on 2008-02-28 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an amazing poem. The imagery is so astonishingly vivid that it plays like a movie in my head as I read it. The dramatic scene of a teardrop falling on a photograph- so beautiful and, well, poetic. The last line wraps it up perfectly.
    Well done.
    The Conqueror
    | Posted on 2008-01-19 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      Remind me to post more on this later, I have to go now. It will have to suffice for now that I loved it beyond a quick explanation.
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      Omyword.....im speechless. That was amazingly beautiful. It touched my heart in so many ways.
    You have a great skill for connecting emotion with your writing. Well done!
    | Posted on 2007-10-19 00:00:00 | by Miwa | [ Reply to This ]
      Incomparable beauty!... don't know what to say. It is a great tribute to those who go away and never return... who sacrifice their lives and dreams for their motherland... it is a solemn tribute to the silent, unseen tears that are shed for them... Very touching!
    | Posted on 2007-10-03 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      i think the others are right...the only word to describe this piece is...beautiful.
    its the perfect following to 'Long Ago And Far Away'.
    this really is outstanding work, Ron. your poetry is always raw and full of emotion...one cannot help but feel a tear while reading this.
    BEAUTIFUL!!
    michelle xx
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont know how you come up with them but you do, you remind me of my friend, he does the same thing. But seriously how do you come up with these stuff its almost like you are a professional. I know when I see something listed by Ron cole it will be could.

    Your biggest fan
    Brian
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, think I'm going to cry. Warning to all - do not read this poem when you are having a slightly emotional day - unless you want to use up all your tissues. But seriously Ron this piece is beautiful, and full of so much emotion. flawless.


    ~lou~
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      We can all add more tear stains to the album because this same scenario has played out in many homes and during all wars. Thank you writing this one for all the soldiers who never came home, Ron, as well as for those left behind to mourn the loss. Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      You certainly pulled at my heart strings with this lovely and knowing tale Ron. Service to one's country can so often change many many lives.
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      Very touching! I don't have much to add to this expect that I was merely teared-eye at the end. Very, very good work!
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad, lovely, and just... beautiful. Your work never ceases to move me.

    Blessed Be and Peace Out
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by Hungarian Girl | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful..amazingly beautiful..it nearly brought tears to my eyes...that's what we poets are, i think ..stupidly sensitive..thanks Ron once again for a lovely poem.
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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