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    dots Submission Name: Those Backwards Lettersdots
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    Author: manwithnoname
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    5.84 - 314/278/117
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1135
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 701



    Description:
       A poem about ambulances.


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    dotsThose Backwards Lettersdots
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    Those backwards letters
    Screaming for everyone to get out of the way

    Those backwards letters
    Screaming their way
    To save someoneís life

    Those backwards letters
    Written in a shade of blue
    Are the most beautiful letters
    To a dying manís eyes

    Those backwards letters
    Carry the dying man
    Upon their infinite backwards strength

    Those backwards letters
    Deliver him up to the defibrillators, the IV, the scalpel

    Those backwards letters
    Screaming for everyone to get out of the way

    Those backwards letters
    Could save your life one day




    Submitted on 2007-09-21 18:48:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ooh! this one's about ambulances.

    i wrote that before i looked at the description, now i feel kind of silly.

    but anyway, i read the title and i was like, "backwards letters? wtf? like in the band Korn, where the R is backwards?"

    but then as i reached the end, i remembered that AMBULANCE is written backwards on the front of ambulances so people can read it in their mirrors =]

    and the reason i even know this is because i'm in marching band and we perform at half time of the football games, and i dont remember if it's been every year or just every game last year, but one of the guys in band would go up to the ambulance people and ask them why ambulance was written backwards bc he thought it was funny.

    if not for that, i never would've even noticed that it was backwards and would've been indefinitely confuddled by this piece


    i like it much better now that i understand it. ((at first i was thinking of my spanish classes that i took beacuse they have all kinds of weird stuff in their alphabet))

    it makes sense =]

    i like it, i like the way you used personification

    and i like the way you just didnt come right out and say "ambulance is written backwards on the front of ambulances" in the poem =]

    good work *does thumbs up and smiles*

    +Moz+
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by GoKart Mozart | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very simple piece.
    there is truth to be found in simplicity.

    ive never given much thought ti backwards letters. i look at them and unscramble them and move on.

    you are right with the claims that you make and i think if you hadnt have said what the piece was about i could still have prolly worked it out at a pinch.

    im not sure i enjoyed the repeptition of those backward letters so frequently. i would perhaps think about cutting one or two of them out...?

    i like the image i get in my head when i think that backward letters could save a life... usually backward is a representation of chaos but not here... its kinda cool.
    | Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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