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    dots Submission Name: Winter, the Martyrdots
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    Author: manwithnoname
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    5.84 - 314/278/117
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Written for a poetry anthology in my Gr. 12 Writer's Craft class. Another poem on how I hate winter.


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    dotsWinter, the Martyrdots
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    Winter dies like a martyr
    The fire of the sun lapping at itís pure, white robe
    I am not sad to see it burn
    My heart jumps for joy

    Birds, as if emerging from a frozen spell, cry out in songs of happiness and love
    Flitting through the air like a million glad tidings of spring
    The robin, red breasted and proud, is the symbol

    The surface, hard and slick
    Has reduced itself to liquid
    The boat, stuck in the winter plains
    Is once again freed
    The fish can now leap out of the water
    Like water rabbits, searching for the sun

    Die, you cold, icy martyr
    Fade away like the thaw
    Do not return, please
    Although I know you wonít comply
    You are always reborn, much to my contempt
    You, icy martyr, are my discontent




    Submitted on 2007-09-21 18:51:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I laugh at the fact that you call winter a Martyr. It can be the cruelest their is of all of our four delicate seasons here on Earth, yet I yearn to believe that winter is the most beautiful of them all. Everything is frailed with death, it's vicious winds and tormenting cold yes could be something most can not handle. But have you ever experienced that of vision of a midnight sky and its stars and the full moon beaming down onto the snow leaving those evergreen coated trees and covered ground a tinted blue everywhere that is covered in snow. The most beautiful thing in the world. Yet Martyr, I'm sure you know it's definition, and the reason you kept it as a title, but I beg to differ the title and the use of the word, for how can winter die not renouncing a religon, for a seanson has no religon, just as Azuire said, it kinda is nerve wracking. I love winter as well. In the Black Bible, the Book of Set, or just simply the Satanic Bilble winter was named after the cruelest of all princes in Hell Leviathan. Lol, sorry I'm getting into religon again and I don't mean too. Though I do like your poem you had some nice images and a lot of thought in it.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh. I love winter, possibly because I cannot function properly in an environment with sunshine all the time. I think I'd be the first person to die of too much summer.

    Die, you cold, icy martyr
    Fade away like the thaw
    Do not return, please
    Although I know you wonít comply
    You are always reborn, much to my contempt
    You, icy martyr, are my discontent


    I'm slightly peeved at the repetition of "icy martyr", nearly three times consecutively, it gets slightly on the nerves when read out. However, the descriptions, though simple are quite vivid. Though I disagree thoroughly with the content, like I said, I love winter.


    The surface, hard and slick
    Has reduced itself to liquid
    The boat, stuck in the winter plains
    Is once again freed


    Thanks for the read.

    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-09-21 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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