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The Seven Seals

Author: manwithnoname
ASL Info:    18/M/Ontario
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Based off Revelation 6, about the opening of the seven seals and the four horseman and other visions.

The Seven Seals

He sailed upon the seven seals
And they opened one by one
The first four said:
“Come forth, the battle upon four legs,
the blazing white, the bloody red,
The black hunger, the Deathly pale,
And cast yourselves upon the Earth”

The fifth one
Showed the slaughtered souls below the altar
“When shall we be avenged?”

The sixth one
Was a visual presentation
Of the great day of wrath
The sun was black, the moon was blood
On this day of judgement

The seventh and final seal
Brought seven peals of trumpet
And the thirds were not dealt mercy

Submitted on 2007-09-21 18:52:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  my pastor is currently working his way through revelation. it is interesting though i only catch a sermon here and there because i teach the youth during the service. the last sermon i caught was just before the seventh one was opened.

personally i am shocking at writing anything when it comes to god. not because i dont love him and not because i dont know what im trying to say but because everything i write sounds trite and cliché. words cannot express or something to that effect.

it is clear to me you have done your homework. your images are biblically supported and you dont seem to have added your own spin onto this. revelation is a highly debated book and it would seem everyone has their own opinion of what it means...

i would almost have expected it to be longer myself but thats okay...

good work.
| Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree. The biblical theme, and the form you created, is highly creative and very original.

I enjoyed reading this piece very much.

| Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Very well written, I was enjoyed it more that you were intellegent enough to know of what you were writting inside of this poem, though I thought it could have been longer than it was. Other than that I think it was a great job that you knew what you were talking about. Because a lot of people decided to write religous based writtings of biblical history, and fail to know of the real truth and setting behind their words. And that to most "Christians" should be labeled as their favored word of "Blashompy". Aw the revelations. The only book in the Bible that I favor, yet still is rather a bit far fetched to me. Yet, that is only my religous opinion. And this is a comment, not a religous lecture. I think that it was great. The commonly use of Biblical like poetry was great, but it would have been greater if it was longer.
| Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]

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