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    dots Submission Name: Perfectiondots
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    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 787
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1817



    Description:
       Its another song.
    She liked it.
    tell my what YOU think.


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    dotsPerfectiondots
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    Eyes of hazel,Lips of silk
    Heavens kisses,"I love you" spilt
    Stop this car and reality
    This world freezes when it's just you and me.
    Cuz Baby...

    Baby you know that it's true.
    Cuz Im nothing here without you.
    Lying her in my arms.
    I know nothing can ever go wrong.
    Lost in you're hazel gaze.
    And that smile that time cannot fade.
    You help me through these dark days.
    I'll hold you're hand forever and always.
    And baby...

    Promises made,promises kept.
    Eyeliner running from the tears you've wept.
    Stroke after stroke I'll wipe you're sorrow away.
    You know I love you and it ain't gonna change.
    Cuz Baby...

    Baby you know that it's true.
    Cuz Im nothing here without you.
    Lying her in my arms.
    I know nothing can ever go wrong.
    Lost in you're hazel gaze.
    And that smile that time cannot fade.
    You help me through these dark days.
    I'll hold you're hand forever and always.
    And Baby...

    Im addicted baby, night after night.
    It hurts you're gone but im hanging on tight.
    If this isn't love, then Im looking no more.
    Cuz baby, I've finally found what I've been searching for.
    AND BABY...

    Baby you know that it's true.
    Cuz Im nothing here without you.
    Lying her in my arms.
    I know nothing can ever go wrong.
    Lost in you're hazel gaze.
    And that smile that time cannot fade.
    You help me through these dark days.
    I'll hold you're hand forever and always.
    Forever and Always...




    Submitted on 2007-09-22 00:31:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love it, I can feel the love from here :P I'm not surprised that she liked it!

    My favourite parts were:

    Im addicted baby, night after night.
    It hurts you're gone but im hanging on tight.
    If this isn't love, then Im looking no more.

    (Because I can relate to the longing)

    And


    Promises made,promises kept.
    Eyeliner running from the tears you've wept.

    (Don't know why I like it - I just do)

    There are two things that I just want to point out though:
    1) I believe you have 1 typing error in there:
    Lying her in you're arms.
    .
    2) A request: for lyrics especially, could you separate each verse and chorus - it makes it so much easier to read. Thanks.

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    DBE™
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by DBE | [ Reply to This ]


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