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    dots Submission Name: I am Afraiddots
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    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 1136
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsI am Afraiddots
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    I am Afraid


    If there is one thing I am afraid of, It is that I know I am not the same as the most,
    But yet I still reach you through the same host,
    But pure love is my ghost.

    I am afraid of maybe one day loving you too much.

    You would not draw my defenses out if you stayed on my arm,
    Sharing reflections of collective love,
    I wish your shoulders to be where I rest in repentance,
    Blessed are these connections to you and me.

    I am afraid of maybe one day loving you too much.

    I am steering clear of lust,
    With my next girl; only under the bonds of matrimony will our love be expressed into touch.
    But in these streets I am walking,
    Where the reality of my flesh screams; It's a fairytale to me to meet such beautiful creatures.
    Females that can see this truth of this intention.

    I am afraid of maybe one day loving you too much.

    I want you to know,
    With this beautiful love that a beautiful few have gifted me,
    I am coated by warmth,
    I feel lucky and blessed in a spiritual symphony.
    But darling?
    I have a calling in me,
    Please don't see in me the things that you don't want to see,
    This life is senseless,
    But if this love was not mine to give; I could never express it.
    Trust in my depths,
    It is the path I travelled to get here,
    I just hope you know,
    I don't feel alone,
    I see you.

    No more am I afraid of maybe one day loving you too much.




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    ||| Comments |||
      hi, forgot to say landing by ship 12/1/07-12/14, booked many land trips, i have to see your land first hand . poe
    | Posted on 2007-09-27 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      peek a boo., very good. poe
    | Posted on 2007-09-27 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      What to say, forfila, this is quintessence of a poem and you are quintessence of a poet.... (i don't quite understand why it is classed as prose, as far as my perception goes i see nothing prosaic about it)... i absolutely agree with the earlier comments... this is beautiful beyond words .... only a pure heart like yours can compose this kind of verse.

    Really, your talent has no limits.
    | Posted on 2007-09-27 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an outstanding and tender love poem, which tells a remarkable story, and reflects noble and rare emotions and intentions. Very well done, Matt!
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! I can realy understand what this is all about I mean the way that you put it, makes what you feel able to be seen. This girl you are deeply in love with you don't want to leave so you ask of her what is in your heart, you ask of her to see only you and not to see what she has probably seen in every other guy on this planet. This is an amazing write with a lot of potential, I know an author, and if you would like I can give you his name and email address so that you could possibly email him, he is putting together a book of poetry from around the world anyone who is willing to submit will have their poetry in it and will have it copywritten. I think that my favorite part of this is this: "I am steering clear of lust,
    With my next girl; only under the bonds of matrimony will our love be expressed into touch.
    But in these streets I am walking,
    Where the reality of my flesh screams; It's a fairytale to me to meet such beautiful creatures.
    Females that can see this truth of this intention."

    It is an amazing write, please do comtinue writing more, I will be sure to check in on your poetry. goodmorning and have a wonderful day.

    Ciao,

    Samantha
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Sharati_hottie | [ Reply to This ]


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