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The Murdering Kind


Author: huntingjonathon
ASL Info:    31/M/San Fran
Elite Ratio:    3 - 69 /117 /61
Words: 42
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The Murdering Kind



The deed
drips from my fingers
like a greenhouse mist
congeals, before slipping
from the velvety fingers
of a rose

and calls
one final time,

"Pavement,
we come, we come."

-jonathon shank




Submitted on 2007-09-22 03:00:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow...crazy.

I like it.
| Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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