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    dots Submission Name: A bagful of balloonsdots
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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 492/502/133
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 123
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    dotsA bagful of balloonsdots
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    A little butterfly walks home,
    with footprints collecting memories,

    Far above the happy rainbow,
    Children cheer over bubbles,

    And once upon a summer,
    she dared to dream..
    of polite smiles and gentle hugs,

    Those coloured bangles make tinkling sounds,
    When rain visited briefly,

    The stained glass painted windows now
    have wrinkles,
    Whilst i still await,

    That narrow pathway smells of woodspice,
    Where we walked - quite more than often,

    Would you still be there,
    Blocking my tears,
    Clutching a bagful of balloons -
    just like some autumns back?




    Submitted on 2007-09-22 12:21:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This has a delightful, childlike innocent quality about it, as if the story were being told by a child! It has a childish endearment about it, and it provokes the sentiments and emotions that one feels while conversing with a child one loves and adores! Nice work, Vedanta!
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it.

    There's almost something innocent and childlike in this...but it evokes a feeling as or more powerful than anything a child can imagine.

    I LOVE the imagery.

    You did a masterful job.

    I want a bag full of balloons!!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]



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