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    dots Submission Name: You can be anythingdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       We all believed we could grow up to be anything we wanted...now face the reality


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    dotsYou can be anythingdots
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    the world has lied to me
    Told me
    that i could be
    anything
    what a joke
    i almost fell for it myself
    I can be anything if i
    have money's help
    if i try my best
    and work hard through years of school
    but i ended up the damned stupid one
    sitting in the corner
    playing the fool

    and once again the world has lied to me
    as they told me i could be
    anything
    if i lifted up my skirt a little higher
    i could be someone
    other's could admire
    only to find a cruel liar
    all they wanted was just to buy her
    as in me i mean
    they wanted to buy a drink
    i thought okay
    if it's free
    only to find the world lied to me
    because nothing's free
    you can only be anything if you
    have the money

    So what the world hs lied to me
    but i will not give up
    that eaisily
    i will always strive to be
    someone something
    that i would be proud to see
    whether i am fmous or
    whether i am homeless
    i will always try to play the fool and believe
    that i can be
    someone something
    as long as i can be, just me
    pretending that i
    can be anything




    Submitted on 2007-09-22 14:07:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I swear to god! That reminds me alot of the anger vents I used to write when I was about 17 years,
    Sometimes our anger can seem miss placed, But through the whole write as a reader you can grasp onto the total emotion you vented whilst penning.
    I really like where it comes from.

    Hope that made some sense

    Love Matt
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is a little true, there are some times people say that we can be anything in the world, but that is with the moneys help. Yet still its possible to do whatever you want, its how strong and determined that you are. I like the end when you'll be someone one day and be happy whether your homeless or famous, it shows that no matter what you become you'll be proud of yourself. The only few things that turned me off in this poem was the lack of punctuation and some mispelled words.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]


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