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    dots Submission Name: Hopeful wishingdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 697
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I understand more than you know, but do you understand why i understand, if you could take back the bad things in life...


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    dotsHopeful wishingdots
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    Through these brown eyes
    I've seen so many things
    Is it through these closed eyes
    That i can remember dreams
    Or am i just hopeful wishing
    that there something more to it
    am i just hopeful wishing
    That there's a reason to see
    What the world has brought me into
    Hopeful wishing makebelieve
    That the world could be perfect

    With these small hands i've colored
    drawn down and wrote plans
    I've smothered my tears
    And would cradle my face
    MY fingers would tap and impatiently rap
    for the time to go by
    wipe the tears from my eye
    And squeeze the blood from these cuts
    It's like a division in me
    My hands do what they can not see
    though i control and behold
    i can not stop it
    for fear that life was not worth
    they do as they please
    With hopeful wishing they will oneday
    get it right

    With these two feet
    I walk and stomp on the street
    In frustration when i can't sleep
    Because of the things in this world
    When i need to breathe
    i step out side to see
    Through the clouds in my mind
    and before i can realize
    as i'm looking up at the sky
    my breath cutting through the cold air
    of the night
    my feet have taken me away
    Walked until night became day
    Because no matter what is keeping me
    Sad frustrated or just uneasy
    I know i can rely on my two feet
    to take me away
    when the world is uneven
    And i can't believe in
    any simple thing to help and straighten
    the street out
    I can always walk away
    In hopeful wishing that life will be okay

    With this mouth i have spoken
    I've said that i don't care
    Once my favorite phrase
    Saying you can burn in hell
    Every lie that slipped my lips
    Everytime i slipped a kiss
    Because the posionous taste left behind
    Will always remind
    that i'm just trying to live
    If only the world would let me
    If only they could see
    To stop and listen to me
    But everytime i get the chance
    I seem to pass it by
    Everytime i say the words
    every time i scream these things
    every time i get it out
    I simply just give the benifit of doubt
    That they are capable of understanding
    In hopeful wishing everytime i get it out
    It came out right
    When the world has got it wrong

    With this life i've felt the pain
    I've stood in silence
    Against the rain
    In hope no one saw me crying
    I know the things i know in mind
    Of all these things lived through my life
    If i could take things back would i
    would i sacrifice all the sympathy i understand
    Would i take away the scars i've left behind
    No way to help the ones like mine
    Would i stop myself from eating
    and take away the pain of feeling
    All the hurt and ugly things that this world can bring
    would i rewind and start over
    Would i take it back and relax
    Could i even do that if i wanted to
    If it were ever possible
    I think i'd live through more trouble
    just to understand why the world
    is so cruel
    Blame it on the devil if you please
    But living life through me i see
    The devil is not real
    And hurt is pain and fear is forged in here
    the heart of all people
    With this life i can acheieve the knowledge
    That we all need
    Live your life and just believe that you can do anything because if you give in to pain
    you'll only stand agaisn't the rain and never understand why the clouds are crying
    This of course is hopeful wishing
    That this world will stop and listen
    That life is life and let it be
    Live your life forget about me
    No matter what i'd never take it back
    For these are my eyes my hands my feet
    this is my mouth to taste the treat
    And this is my life that understands
    That there can be life
    In hopeful wishing




    Submitted on 2007-09-22 16:26:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this is amazing...so much of it I can relate to. You've captured these thoughts and emotions so perfectly. It flows kind of like a song...the sort of song I might be singing along to one day and then burst into tears...it touches you on a level deeper than I can explain.

    Really, really beautiful...
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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