[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: The Madnessdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 542
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 748

       It is indeed maddening.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Madnessdots

    I can't bear it when you touch me
    I can't stand it when you don't
    It seems I've got it under control
    But when I ask, you won't

    I can't stand the way you look at me
    I can't handle it when you look away
    I don't know how to fight this madness
    I don't know what the fuck I should say

    It drives me crazy to think about you
    Cause I know you're not thinking of me
    I don't need to be enthralled
    When I've finally broken free

    I can't bear it when you touch me
    I can't fight the urge to touch you
    And you mean nothing to me
    And I don't know what to do...

    Submitted on 2007-09-22 16:31:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Once again, i thought the rhyme scheme was very well written. I can understand how this is maddening. This is much like breaking your hand but still wanting to masturbate. I think this is about being wanted. You don't even care who it is but you just want them to want you so you feel well, wanted. Very well written my dear.
    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      friday night...saturday morning
    so very in your face

    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty powerful. I like it.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by Greiga | [ Reply to This ]
      Powerful! Well written! You've penned one huge dilemma that may take some really difficult thought before it's labeled "in the past." There's some "madness" in all of us, but some are better at concealing theirs. Good luck! Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, you are really riding on the horns of a dilemma and it comes across clearly in "Madness". Ain't it a real b i t c h when these mixed emotions flood over a burgeoning relationship.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Wavelength written by saartha
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Every..... written by jackz
    written by Daniel Barlow
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Happy Saint Patrick's Day written by poetotoe
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    AI written by poetotoe
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Push written by JanePlane
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]