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    dots Submission Name: The Madnessdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 547
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 748



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       It is indeed maddening.


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    dotsThe Madnessdots
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    I can't bear it when you touch me
    I can't stand it when you don't
    It seems I've got it under control
    But when I ask, you won't

    I can't stand the way you look at me
    I can't handle it when you look away
    I don't know how to fight this madness
    I don't know what the fuck I should say

    It drives me crazy to think about you
    Cause I know you're not thinking of me
    I don't need to be enthralled
    When I've finally broken free

    I can't bear it when you touch me
    I can't fight the urge to touch you
    And you mean nothing to me
    And I don't know what to do...




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      Once again, i thought the rhyme scheme was very well written. I can understand how this is maddening. This is much like breaking your hand but still wanting to masturbate. I think this is about being wanted. You don't even care who it is but you just want them to want you so you feel well, wanted. Very well written my dear.
    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      friday night...saturday morning
    so very in your face

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty powerful. I like it.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by Greiga | [ Reply to This ]
      Powerful! Well written! You've penned one huge dilemma that may take some really difficult thought before it's labeled "in the past." There's some "madness" in all of us, but some are better at concealing theirs. Good luck! Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, you are really riding on the horns of a dilemma and it comes across clearly in "Madness". Ain't it a real b i t c h when these mixed emotions flood over a burgeoning relationship.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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