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    dots Submission Name: Enthralleddots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 501
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 937



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    dotsEnthralleddots
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    I want to flood your senses
    With my own brand of desire
    I want to open up your mind
    And set your soul on fire

    I want to take you to the edge
    And bring you back again
    I want to tear your world apart
    And cover myself in your skin

    I want to break down all your walls
    I want to taste your sweat
    I want to give you the experience of a lifetime
    A memory you'll never forget

    I want to rip past your inhibitions
    And bake you in my heat
    I want to show you another place
    And give you a taste of something sweet

    I want to explore you with my tongue
    I want to take my time
    I want to cover your body in pleasure
    And completely blow your mind

    I want to be conquered
    I want you enthralled
    I don't want this tiny piece of you
    I want it all...




    Submitted on 2007-09-22 16:32:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      oh yes, sexy and seductive, like that forbidden fruit.....i love the way this piece makes me feel, i think that this is a perfect way for you to express yourself, that this style seams to embrace you as much as you embrace your little addictions...i hope you keep writing, im loving reading it

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    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I don't think too many could refuse you. I expect there will be a line up at your door soon. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, Okay I give in. You can have me...just say when and where! LOL
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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