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    dots Submission Name: Enthralleddots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 529
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 937



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    dotsEnthralleddots
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    I want to flood your senses
    With my own brand of desire
    I want to open up your mind
    And set your soul on fire

    I want to take you to the edge
    And bring you back again
    I want to tear your world apart
    And cover myself in your skin

    I want to break down all your walls
    I want to taste your sweat
    I want to give you the experience of a lifetime
    A memory you'll never forget

    I want to rip past your inhibitions
    And bake you in my heat
    I want to show you another place
    And give you a taste of something sweet

    I want to explore you with my tongue
    I want to take my time
    I want to cover your body in pleasure
    And completely blow your mind

    I want to be conquered
    I want you enthralled
    I don't want this tiny piece of you
    I want it all...




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    ||| Comments |||
      oh yes, sexy and seductive, like that forbidden fruit.....i love the way this piece makes me feel, i think that this is a perfect way for you to express yourself, that this style seams to embrace you as much as you embrace your little addictions...i hope you keep writing, im loving reading it

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I don't think too many could refuse you. I expect there will be a line up at your door soon. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, Okay I give in. You can have me...just say when and where! LOL
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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